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A poll on feedback

Below the cut, a review that's half real, half made-up (the real parts are taken from a review on someone else's story in another fandom), plus the poll.

ETA: I didn't write this review, btw, someone else did. I just substituted HP canon stuff for the other fandom's canon.


Consider the following review (and take into account that the reviewer and author have never met before):

Darling, your heart is in the right place, but your canon is not. Also, I must quibble with grammar and characterization. That is not to say you do not have good ideas, but that you need to better familiarise yourself with the fandom before you try to express them.

First, your Remus is off. He doesn't seem like an alpha male personality anywhere in the books -- in fact, he seems more the type to hang back and see what develops before taking charge and storming in head first. It's true that brashness and impulsivity are Gryffindor traits, but Remus is probably the least brash and impulsive Gryffindor, all things considered.

Second, I don't recognise Snape at all. He doesn't seem like the "hearts and roses" type of person who would be this romantic. I can't see him offering to make tea after having sex, at least not in such an obviously lovey-dovey fashion. He might offer tea in a sarcastic fashion, but he wouldn't scramble to his feet and wait on Remus just because he's just had the orgasm of his life.

Considering that this is supposed to take place in the present day, I don't understand why you have the World Trade Centre intact when Remus and Severus visit New York while looking for Macnair. It seems weird that you have Remus and Severus chasing Dolohov down a staircase in the North Tower in 2004. Also, Severus can't be much older than Remus: they attended school in the same year (this is a canon fact).

Also, your ending? Um, no. As much as I love Remus and Severus reunions after the war, and even Remus/Severus love, you can't just ignore the end of HBP and Tonks. Remus doesn't seem like an asshole and it would bother him to cut Tonks loose without a word. It's not that you have to write scene upon angsty scene of tearful farewells, it's just a matter of dealing with "the Tonks problem" if you like. You completely failed to acknowledge Tonks altogether, which is a weakness in your story.

My verdict? Get a canon nazi of a beta and let them rip you to pieces. It will tighten up both your canon and your writing, with tends to be a bit disjointed at times. With a sufficient beta and a rewrite, you'll have a good story.


Poll #562732 Perceptions on feedback

What would you call this feedback?

Constructive criticism
48(43.2%)
Criticism (but not concrit)
56(50.5%)
A flame
3(2.7%)
Something else (explain in a comment)
4(3.6%)

Would you say this feedback is:

Rude
0(0.0%)
Polite
1(0.9%)
Condescending
7(6.2%)
Thoughtful
0(0.0%)
Helpful
0(0.0%)
Pretentious
0(0.0%)
Honest
1(0.9%)
Valuable
0(0.0%)
Worthless
1(0.9%)
Something else (explain in a comment)
2(1.8%)

If an author called this feedback a flame, you would say they were being:

Reasonable
25(23.1%)
Unreasonable
83(76.9%)

What do you think about authors complaining to their regular readers about not-so-stellar feedback?

They're perfectly justified
2(1.8%)
It's pointless
9(8.3%)
I don't agree with the practice, but it's an understandable reaction
35(32.1%)
It's outright wanky
9(8.3%)
Fine if done in private, not so fine if done in public.
54(49.5%)



I've pretty much said all I had to say about crit earlier this year, but I'd really like to get an idea of what everyone else thinks. Please pimp this if you can. If you play in the Star Wars fandom, imadra_blue is asking the same questions here.

Also? Pfffft.
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